My most improved essay was my descriptive essay. This essay was my favorite to write because I chose to write about my favorite hobby; horseback riding. I talked about riding my horse, Hercules, and jumping him for the first time. I went into specific details of the entire process of getting the horse out of the stall to the point of actually jumping him, and the way I felt after that moment. I also went into deep detail of the bond between Hercules and I. This essay was easy and fun to write because of the fact it was about something that is my world; something that means a lot to me. I was able to talk about my emotion, and the little surrounding details of the story. I chose this essay as my most improved because I normally do not use very many details or descriptive words in my essay. In this one, I went all out for it and it turned out great. It was almost as if the reader was right there with me. Also, instead of telling the story, I showed it. The reader could imagine the whole scenario in their head because of all the details I put into the essay. The reader could actually see me and feel what the weather was like. This was truly my all time favorite essay to write.
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